PLZ HELP ME (ENGLISH GRAMMER HELP)

PLZ HELP ME (ENGLISH GRAMMER HELP)

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hi frnds
i want to wish diwali to indian soldiers using this link
https://secure.mygov.in/group-issue/sandesh2sol...

created a design but have a lot of grammatical mistakes so plz help me to design error less design.

https://cdn0.desidime.com/attachments/photos/285265/medium/3666477a0hq9j.jpg?1480972313

dnt say about repeted text named arya . i will remove it before posting to soldier brothers and sisters

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Poora Hindi mein hi likho naa..

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We are civilians celebrating diwali fearless due to real diwali wishes from soldiers as they are sacrificing everything and serving nation.

Let’s break the sentence:

1. We are civilians celebrating diwali….
2. fearless due to real diwali wishes from soldiers
3. as they are sacrificing everything and serving nation.

You have created a long sentence. And that will confuse people. Break it. Like this:

1. We are civilians celebrating diwali.
2. We are celebrating it fearlessly due to our soldiers.
3. So we are thankful to these soldiers who are sacrificing everything and serving nation.

Note that I am not changing the meaning of your sentence here. I am simply rewriting to make it clear. Because the first rule of writing is to:

Write with clarity.

If you notice, the second sentence links to first because of the word “it.” And the same goes for the third sentence. The linking word is “these [soldiers].”

There is meaning in linking sentences. It creates a powerful effect as you read from one sentence to another. Like you are doing it right now. All these are connected sentences. You can feel the effect of each word. You can see it. Touch it. Hear it. And experience a whole new world. All because of language.

Because language creates meaning. And meaning creates ideas. Good ideas. As well as bad ideas.

Of course, what I wrote is simple and easy to understand. But also notice that it lacks the punch. It is not something people will remember. So we rewrite everything once again. While doing so, we also change “diwali” to “Diwali.”

But how can we rewrite a sentence to make it punchy? How can we make our words shine? Make ’em stand out? Make ’em remember? Many ways:

→ Use repetition:

Today, we civilians are celebrating Diwali. Without worry. Without panic. And without fear. All thanks to YOU – the soldiers serving our nation. Thank you!

Here we use a series of pain together. First, we repeat the main word. Then we add a word next to that. Then we stitch them together. That’s how we have: “Without worry. Without panic. And without fear.

You can also expand the first sentence, like this:

We civilians are lucky. Because we are celebrating Diwali. Celebrating life. And celebrating freedom. Without worry. Without panic. And without fear. All thanks to YOU – the soldiers serving our nation. Thank you!

→ Use comparison:

While we civilians are experiencing the warmth of Diwali, there are soldiers standing out there, in the cold, protecting us all the time. Here is my salute to these soldiers. For dedicating your life to protect our country. Our family. And all of us. Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!

(Compared warm to cold. Plus, used repetition)

→ Use rhyming words.

Think of all the words and write them down. Now start connecting:

Colder. Shoulder. Bolder. Soldier.

The air is colder…
Breezing through their shoulder…
But they don’t go home like us…
As they are John-cena-jaise bolder…
Our Indian soldier…

This Diwali, new couples are changing nappy…
But we are bursting crackers as we are happy…
While munching lays potato chips…
And shaking our hips…
Then enjoying hot water even when it is colder…
All thanks to our Indian soldier…
https://cdn3.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_lol.gif Oh man, this is fun! https://cdn3.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_lol.gif

There are so many ways to write a sentence. First, and most important, is to keep your sentences simple. And you do that by using short sentences. Which creates clarity. And that, you will remember, is the first rule of writing!

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@sidbhai has taken it to a whole new level. https://cdn3.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_cool.gif

I’m a fan of your simple writing style. https://cdn1.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_smile.gif

Just a small correction. “more bolder” – redundancy – “bolder” itself breaks into “more bold”.

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@Magus wrote:

@sidbhai has taken it to a whole new level. https://cdn3.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_cool.gif

I’m a fan of your simple writing style. https://cdn1.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_smile.gif

Just a small correction. “more bolder” – redundancy – “bolder” itself breaks into “more bold”.

CC @Achilles @DealSeeker @gsh57


@sidbhai I don’t even know how to begin responding to OP’s question after that in-depth and extensive coverage of what could be done. Bravo! https://cdn0.desidime.com/smileys/EEvuH.gif

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@sidbhai wrote:

We are civilians celebrating diwali fearless due to real diwali wishes from soldiers as they are sacrificing everything and serving nation.

Let’s break the sentence:

1. We are civilians celebrating diwali….
2. fearless due to real diwali wishes from soldiers
3. as they are sacrificing everything and serving nation.

You have created a long sentence. And that will confuse people. Break it. Like this:

1. We are civilians celebrating diwali.
2. We are celebrating it fearlessly due to our soldiers.
3. So we are thankful to these soldiers who are sacrificing everything and serving nation.

Note that I am not changing the meaning of your sentence here. I am simply rewriting to make it clear. Because the first rule of writing is to:

Write with clarity.

If you notice, the second sentence links to first because of the word “it.” And the same goes for the third sentence. The linking word is “these [soldiers].”

There is meaning in linking sentences. It creates a powerful effect as you read from one sentence to another. Like you are reading right now. All these are connected sentences. You can feel the effect of each word. You can see it. Touch it. Hear it. And experience a whole new world. All because of language.

Because language creates meaning. And meaning creates ideas. Good ideas. As well as bad ideas.

Of course, what I wrote is simple and easy to understand. But also notice that it lacks the punch. It is not something people will remember. So we re-write everything once again. While doing so, we also change “diwali” to “Diwali.”

But how can we rewrite a sentence to make it punchy? How can we make your words shine? Make ’em stand out? Make ’em remember? Many ways:

→ Use repetition:

Today, we civilians are celebrating Diwali. Without worry. Without panic. And without fear. All thanks to the YOU – the soldiers serving our nation. Thank you!

Here we use a series of pain together. First, we repeat the main word. Then we add a word next to that. Then we stitch them together. That’s how we have: “Without worry. Without panic. And without fear.

You can also expand the first sentence, like this:

We civilians are lucky. Because we are celebrating Diwali. Celebrating life. And celebrating freedom. Without worry. Without panic. And without fear. All thanks to the YOU – the soldiers serving our nation. Thank you!

→ Use comparison:

While we civilians are experiencing the warmth of Diwali, there are soldiers standing out there, in the cold, protecting us all the time. Here is my salute to these soldiers. For dedicating your life to protect our country. Our family. And all of us. Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!

(Compared warm to cold. Plus, used repetition)

→ Use rhyming words.

Think of all the words and write them down. Now start connecting:

Colder. Shoulder. Bolder. Solider.

The air is colder…
Breezing through their shoulder…
But they don’t go home like us…
As they are John-cena-jaise bolder…
Our Indian soldier…

This Diwali, we are happy…
Munching lays potato chips…
While shaking our hips…
And enjoying hot water even when it is colder…
All thanks to our Indian solider…
https://cdn3.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_lol.gif Oh man, this is fun! https://cdn3.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_lol.gif

There are so many ways to write a sentence. First, and most important, is to keep your sentences dead simple. And you do that by using short sentences. Which creates clarity. And that, you will remember, is the first rule of writing!


Thx a lot bro

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BTW, it’s not gramer, it’s grammar. https://cdn2.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_toungueout.gif

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@Magus wrote:

BTW, it’s not gramer, it’s grammar. https://cdn2.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_toungueout.gif


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@Magus wrote:

@sidbhai has taken it to a whole new level. https://cdn3.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_cool.gif

I’m a fan of your simple writing style. https://cdn1.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_smile.gif

Just a small correction. “more bolder” – redundancy – “bolder” itself breaks into “more bold”.

CC @Achilles @DealSeeker @gsh57


My bad. I was in the moment. Few years ago, I was your typical pedantic teenager. Not anymore. For several reasons. Corrected from “more bolder” to “John-Cena-jaise bolder.” https://cdn1.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_biggrin.gif (brain refuses to think)

@DealSeeker – You are too kind. You ignored my mistakes and looked at the brighter side. There is a reason you are loved. https://cdn3.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_wink.gif

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@roman reigns wrote:

@Magus wrote:

BTW, it’s not gramer, it’s grammar. https://cdn2.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_toungueout.gif


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…to grammer! https://cdn1.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_eek.gif

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https://cdn0.desidime.com/attachments/photos/285363/medium/3666658j0b4lj.jpg?1480972353

THX A LOT SIDBHAI FOR HELP

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@sidbhai wrote:

We are civilians celebrating diwali fearless due to real diwali wishes from soldiers as they are sacrificing everything and serving nation.

Let’s break the sentence:

1. We are civilians celebrating diwali….
2. fearless due to real diwali wishes from soldiers
3. as they are sacrificing everything and serving nation.

You have created a long sentence. And that will confuse people. Break it. Like this:

1. We are civilians celebrating diwali.
2. We are celebrating it fearlessly due to our soldiers.
3. So we are thankful to these soldiers who are sacrificing everything and serving nation.

Note that I am not changing the meaning of your sentence here. I am simply rewriting to make it clear. Because the first rule of writing is to:

Write with clarity.

If you notice, the second sentence links to first because of the word “it.” And the same goes for the third sentence. The linking word is “these [soldiers].”

There is meaning in linking sentences. It creates a powerful effect as you read from one sentence to another. Like you are doing it right now. All these are connected sentences. You can feel the effect of each word. You can see it. Touch it. Hear it. And experience a whole new world. All because of language.

Because language creates meaning. And meaning creates ideas. Good ideas. As well as bad ideas.

Of course, what I wrote is simple and easy to understand. But also notice that it lacks the punch. It is not something people will remember. So we rewrite everything once again. While doing so, we also change “diwali” to “Diwali.”

But how can we rewrite a sentence to make it punchy? How can we make our words shine? Make ’em stand out? Make ’em remember? Many ways:

→ Use repetition:

Today, we civilians are celebrating Diwali. Without worry. Without panic. And without fear. All thanks to YOU – the soldiers serving our nation. Thank you!

Here we use a series of pain together. First, we repeat the main word. Then we add a word next to that. Then we stitch them together. That’s how we have: “Without worry. Without panic. And without fear.

You can also expand the first sentence, like this:

We civilians are lucky. Because we are celebrating Diwali. Celebrating life. And celebrating freedom. Without worry. Without panic. And without fear. All thanks to YOU – the soldiers serving our nation. Thank you!

→ Use comparison:

While we civilians are experiencing the warmth of Diwali, there are soldiers standing out there, in the cold, protecting us all the time. Here is my salute to these soldiers. For dedicating your life to protect our country. Our family. And all of us. Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!

(Compared warm to cold. Plus, used repetition)

→ Use rhyming words.

Think of all the words and write them down. Now start connecting:

Colder. Shoulder. Bolder. Soldier.

The air is colder…
Breezing through their shoulder…
But they don’t go home like us…
As they are John-cena-jaise bolder…
Our Indian soldier…

This Diwali, new couples are changing nappy…
But we are bursting crackers as we are happy…
While munching lays potato chips…
And shaking our hips…
Then enjoying hot water even when it is colder…
All thanks to our Indian soldier…
https://cdn3.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_lol.gif Oh man, this is fun! https://cdn3.desidime.com/assets/textile-editor/icon_lol.gif

There are so many ways to write a sentence. First, and most important, is to keep your sentences simple. And you do that by using short sentences. Which creates clarity. And that, you will remember, is the first rule of writing!


great bro..hope you are a writer..

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